Entrepreneurship Development and Communication Skills (1+1)

Precise writing

(i) The young girl, dressed in jeans and wearing a cap to protect her hair went up to the window of the burning house, quietly pushed it open, went inside and after floundering through heavy clouds of smoke and burning rubble discovered what she was searching for and came out carrying the charred remains of the precious briefcase.

Note that the above sentence contains 57 words and a lot of details. Stripped of all unnecessary details the sentence can be reduced to: the girl brought the charred remains of the recious briefcase from the burning house. (14 words)

(ii) The unfortunate victim of the murderous attack firmly believes, if her statement is to be repeated, that she can identify these men as her attackers and no doubt it is an honest belief on her part.(36 words)

Condensed form – the victim believes that she can identify her attackers. (9 words)

(iii) Mahatma Gandhi spoke with young men and women, older men and women and also with the middle aged people.(18 words)

Condensed form – Mahatma Gandhi spoke with everyone.(5 words)

(iv) One could travel by bicycle, by scooter, by motor bike, by car, by taxi, by bus, by train; but non is better than walking.(23 words)

Condensed form – walking is the best mode of travel. (7 words)

(v) Her father belittled everything she had been through, making fun of her sufferings and laughing away the problems of hostel life. (21 words)

Condensed form – Her father belittled everything she had been through. (8 words)

Now three more examples are given below; each passage is followed by a suggested heading, and it précis.